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insaneladybug) wrote2017-11-26 08:36 am
insaneladybug) wrote2017-11-26 08:36 am
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Revising the old fic
So I'm back to thinking of how I could redo my old Pokemon fic Dead and Alive. I read through it again and pondered.
One thing I would probably want to do is to change what actually happens. The original story has a fire and explosion, and since I just did that in the fic I just finished, it should probably be a different disaster that happens in the old fic. Considering rapids/waterfalls/something else to do with water.
Next problem: James reveals at the end that he tricked and fought off his attacker in the woods and then was pushed off a cliff to the beach below. I would like him to trick his attacker in a redo, but if it's in the water, it might be harder to do.
I guess the story really is more that he's missing rather than positively dead, since there's no body and only a bloodied glove Pikachu finds, but then again, with the explosion they figure he was caught in it and there isn't anything left to find. If I change things to water, I might play up the missing angle more, although still with people considering him dead.
I'm still thinking of each story being self-contained and not referenced in other stories (aside from the crossover ones and the starfish oneshot) because I like to keep having different ways that Ash and company sees Team Rocket showing their goodness and somehow I like it most when such stories are not connected. That way it feels fresh each time. Therefore, this story would not reference the one I just finished, for example. But we'll see.
Still debating the Giovanni problem, as while I don't really think I want him to be trying to kill James, I'm also not sure I want the stickiness of an imposter in there, as that could take some of the focus away from the main problem. Maybe I should just make it some creep in the organization who thinks Giovanni will reward him for getting rid of such incompetence. Instead, Giovanni is furious that the person acted without his permission. (Tentatively thinking of making it two creeps and calling them Bonnie and Clyde. **giggle.**)
My own incompetence with writing different aspects of the Pokemon world, and the Pokemon themselves, would of course be smoothed out, since now I would really know what I was doing, at least well enough to be convincing. The original fic clearly shows my mind was on one thing and one thing only and I had little interest in even keeping basic facts and spellings straight.
Things like Meowth being attacked would be fleshed out, with Jessie absolutely distraught and refusing to lose him too.
James' misadventures, like choosing a disguise and later hiding in an old house, would be fleshed out as well.
I should probably wait a while before posting this fic in any case, but it will take a good long while to write the revision, if I write it, so probably no problem there.
One thing I would probably want to do is to change what actually happens. The original story has a fire and explosion, and since I just did that in the fic I just finished, it should probably be a different disaster that happens in the old fic. Considering rapids/waterfalls/something else to do with water.
Next problem: James reveals at the end that he tricked and fought off his attacker in the woods and then was pushed off a cliff to the beach below. I would like him to trick his attacker in a redo, but if it's in the water, it might be harder to do.
I guess the story really is more that he's missing rather than positively dead, since there's no body and only a bloodied glove Pikachu finds, but then again, with the explosion they figure he was caught in it and there isn't anything left to find. If I change things to water, I might play up the missing angle more, although still with people considering him dead.
I'm still thinking of each story being self-contained and not referenced in other stories (aside from the crossover ones and the starfish oneshot) because I like to keep having different ways that Ash and company sees Team Rocket showing their goodness and somehow I like it most when such stories are not connected. That way it feels fresh each time. Therefore, this story would not reference the one I just finished, for example. But we'll see.
Still debating the Giovanni problem, as while I don't really think I want him to be trying to kill James, I'm also not sure I want the stickiness of an imposter in there, as that could take some of the focus away from the main problem. Maybe I should just make it some creep in the organization who thinks Giovanni will reward him for getting rid of such incompetence. Instead, Giovanni is furious that the person acted without his permission. (Tentatively thinking of making it two creeps and calling them Bonnie and Clyde. **giggle.**)
My own incompetence with writing different aspects of the Pokemon world, and the Pokemon themselves, would of course be smoothed out, since now I would really know what I was doing, at least well enough to be convincing. The original fic clearly shows my mind was on one thing and one thing only and I had little interest in even keeping basic facts and spellings straight.
Things like Meowth being attacked would be fleshed out, with Jessie absolutely distraught and refusing to lose him too.
James' misadventures, like choosing a disguise and later hiding in an old house, would be fleshed out as well.
I should probably wait a while before posting this fic in any case, but it will take a good long while to write the revision, if I write it, so probably no problem there.